We found a stream that night
away from everywhere but us –
water voices whispering,
the honey of first times,
wind feathery on urgent skin.
Perhaps a folly, our rush
into together and tomorrow –
forever’s promissory note
before the debt of everyday.
Let’s go back
and lie beside the stream again,
listen for the water voices,
feel the wind’s breath
before we disappear.
– Sarah Russell
First published in The Houseboat
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Troubled.. yet hopeful!
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Yes. Thanks, Rajani.
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What can I say Sarah, this is exquisitely superb, and I loved every line, especially, “The wind feathery on urgent skin”, the imagery took my breathe away.
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Thanks, Ivor. I appreciate your kind words.
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‘forever’s promissory note
before the debt of everyday.”
wonderful lines. ah, if only we could go back….
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Thanks, Beth. Yes, too often it’s the day to day that dulls a relationship.
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Love this Sarah! Looking forward to January–of all things.
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Thanks, Catherine. Yes, January isn’t usually a month to savor, but going to the conference will be wonderful!
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the honey of first times – excellent!
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Thank you, Qbit!
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It’s not always possible to go back, but when it is, we should!
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Yes. The problem is catching it before it is too late.
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To find out “water voices whispering / the honey of first times” must be mesmerizing…..
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Yes!! Thank you for reading, Sumana.
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I love this especially; “Perhaps a folly, our rush into together and tomorrow – forever’s promissory note before the debt of everyday.” Beautifully executed!💞💞
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Thank you, Sanaa.
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I love this! It was a mesmerizing read.
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Aw, thanks Al. Are you ready for NaNo? Wishing you luck!
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You’re welcome! Yes! So ready! This novel has been pestering me this week for me to write it. 🙂
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To have a memory like this is a treasure even if we cannot come back… time can not reverse… but maybe finding some way back would be possible with something strong like this.
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Agreed, Bjorn. But sometimes you have to say If only…
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Hi Sarah, this is a stunning write, I love it. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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Thanks a lot, John.
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“…tomorrow’s promissory note before the debt of everyday”….what a powerful line!!!!!! I LOVE the closing stanza!
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Thanks a lot, Sherry. Loved your La Loba today too!
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Let’s… my heart’s ears are ready. 🙂
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Smiling at your comment, Magaly. Thanks!
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Do we live only in those fleeting first moments of love? Every Avalon is springtime and apples and Ariel’s tenor lighter than wind. How dappled, how fine, how water this memory. Yes.
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Thanks, Brendan. I suppose some people think those first moments will last. I just like to visit them again once in awhile.
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…”rush to together and tomorrow, forever’s promissory note”… so beautifully descriptive, and portray such a magical moment caught in time.
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Thanks so much, Bev.
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What a beautiful poem…thinking back, reminiscing to a romantic, peaceful spot….but can we ever go back and recapture the magic.
‘forever’s promissory note
before the debt of everyday.’
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Thanks, Donna. I’m not sure if we can or not. I expect that may be the question I was trying to solve.
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One has to wonder how many do go back, attempt to recapture…Perhaps that is why our world has become so embedded with seeming quicksand,
Elizabeth
https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2017/10/29/in-present-moments/
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Thanks, Elizabeth. I agree. Often recapturing love tries to happen when too many hurts have been caused to reclaim it
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Gorgeous writing!
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Thank you very much.
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I absolutely loved every word of it very beautifully penned or in one word Stunning
I think it is good thing to try to recapture these moments
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Thank you so much, Marja!
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Tis the nature of a long term relationship. If you even remember the initial moments that is good. If you have a long term relationship ,that is miraculous in itself ,considering the times we live in.Obviously I am a person who has few expectations:)
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Yeah, most these days don’t work out. Kissed a bunch of frogs, but my guy is still a prince after 29 years. I don’t take it for granted. Thanks for reading, Cressida!
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Great poem Sarah. I especially liked the opening lines, “We found a stream that night
away from everywhere but us –”
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Thanks so much, Ali.
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